In the night

Someone, somewhere is playing a tune
his fingers strumming in the gloom
on the trembling strings. And my heart
echoes the pulse of his subtle art.
Someone, somewhere is playing a tune,
calling to me through the rainswept dark.
In the unknown distance, under the moon
someone, somewhere is playing a tune
on the trembling strings of my heart.

This is a response to the picture above, by newjack at photobucket, the Monday mural at poefusion.  My response came to me as a very complete visual and aural image, though it’s nothing I’ve ever experienced! It started as a triolet but I modified it because I didn’t want the refrain lines to appear together until the final couplet, and because the repetition just seemed to work better this way.

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16 responses to “In the night

  1. Perched on a windowsill,
    the air still,
    still
    I listen
    and hear…

  2. I imagine this tune that’s playing is beautiful so I will stretch my ears to hear it with you. Nice job. Keep up the good work. Have a nice day.

  3. Hey I love that image, it’s something about those lines in the background that look like strings

  4. Great weaving of the repeating lines. I agree with your decision to wait for the merging until the final couplet.

  5. i am an avid fan of repetitive verse,, so this one really “struck a chord” with me.. excellent…

  6. this is really beautiful.

  7. Wow. It would make a great song as well. Well done.

  8. Excellent repetitions! The subtle change in meaning is so smooth and natural…like a song itself!

  9. A beautiful and technically accomplished poem that fits beautifully with the image you have chosen. A marvelous response to the prompt.

  10. This does fit beautifully with the picture, I can hear it being sung. What a gift you have.

  11. What a gorgeous poem to accompany such a brilliant vision.

  12. Enjoyed this and the image. The pairing reminds me of a reading I heard about a year ago with poet, Tyehimba Jess. leadbelly: poems

  13. Glad I got here! I don’t how I had missed reading this!

    trying to find a meaning

  14. Beautifully evocative.

  15. What a talented entry.
    You make this photo look like Life is Art.
    Beautiful writing…
    TJ

  16. Picture and words in perfect harmony. I’m so glad I stopped here.

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