Comments on: Inner light http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/2008/07/07/inner-light/ Words about writing, singing, living and loving Thu, 19 Nov 2009 07:36:04 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 By: symbolicgodzilla http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/2008/07/07/inner-light/#comment-736 symbolicgodzilla Tue, 08 Jul 2008 16:28:30 +0000 http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/?p=363#comment-736 This one really gets me Lirone, coming as I am from thinking someone had really changed for the better to realizing they've actually gotten worse. I love the last two lines but the whole motif of the light that turns out to be perhaps an illusion is very powerful. This one really gets me Lirone, coming as I am from thinking someone had really changed for the better to realizing they’ve actually gotten worse. I love the last two lines but the whole motif of the light that turns out to be perhaps an illusion is very powerful.

]]> By: gautami tripathy http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/2008/07/07/inner-light/#comment-735 gautami tripathy Tue, 08 Jul 2008 13:40:17 +0000 http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/?p=363#comment-735 The long lines work so well here.. <a href="http://firmlyrooted.blogspot.com/2008/07/piece-of-charcoal-split-into-splinters.html" rel="nofollow">piece of charcoal split into splinters</a> The long lines work so well here..

piece of charcoal split into splinters

]]> By: nathan1313 http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/2008/07/07/inner-light/#comment-733 nathan1313 Tue, 08 Jul 2008 01:50:51 +0000 http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/?p=363#comment-733 I like how you develop the view of this inner light through the progress of the poem and I love rhyme when it's done well like this. It's refreshing to see. I like how you develop the view of this inner light through the progress of the poem and I love rhyme when it’s done well like this. It’s refreshing to see.

]]> By: pieceofpie http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/2008/07/07/inner-light/#comment-731 pieceofpie Mon, 07 Jul 2008 21:41:14 +0000 http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/?p=363#comment-731 i agree the long lines and rhyme are soothing to the story... fire and ice... ouch, burr... i agree the long lines and rhyme are soothing to the story… fire and ice… ouch, burr…

]]> By: lirone http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/2008/07/07/inner-light/#comment-730 lirone Mon, 07 Jul 2008 18:28:06 +0000 http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/?p=363#comment-730 Thanks for your comments! I started off with half-length alternate rhymed lines... but it just felt too bitty... glad you approve of my decision to merge them into single lines. Thanks for your comments!

I started off with half-length alternate rhymed lines… but it just felt too bitty… glad you approve of my decision to merge them into single lines.

]]> By: johemmant http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/2008/07/07/inner-light/#comment-726 johemmant Mon, 07 Jul 2008 17:08:16 +0000 http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/?p=363#comment-726 Great ending to this piece and yes, the longer lines work well. Great ending to this piece and yes, the longer lines work well.

]]> By: Crafty Green Poet http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/2008/07/07/inner-light/#comment-725 Crafty Green Poet Mon, 07 Jul 2008 16:58:09 +0000 http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/?p=363#comment-725 I like the long lines too, I like the long lines too,

]]> By: christine http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/2008/07/07/inner-light/#comment-724 christine Mon, 07 Jul 2008 15:11:57 +0000 http://wordsthatsing.wordpress.com/?p=363#comment-724 Your long lines give a noble sound to the poem. The narrator's musings and questions are universal in nature. Your long lines give a noble sound to the poem. The narrator’s musings and questions are universal in nature.

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