When I watch you, I see the games you play
I see the hopes you are afraid to dream
The fears that drive you to push and stray
When I watch you, I see your false smiles beam
I see the defensiveness in your eyes
And I also see your frail humanity gleam
When I watch you, my smile implies
That naivety underlies my respect
And yet I am not unaware of your lies
When I watch you, I know what is in prospect
The pain that others’ choices have forced on you
And yet I cannot give you all that you expect
When I watch you, I feel affection and concern, it’s true -
But still I am watchful of the flaws deep in you.
This is inspired by a prompt at readwritepoem – to write a poem based around the line “when I watch you”. For once, this isn’t a poem in any way about my ex!












4 responses so far ↓
deanjbaker // June 12, 2008 at 12:07 pm |
good to see this
Christine // June 12, 2008 at 3:40 pm |
Nice form to match the refrain. An interesting portrayal of human insecurities and disimulation. Thanks for playing along at RWP!
Power Control Panels // June 13, 2008 at 8:14 am |
Nice quotes
lirone // June 23, 2008 at 10:53 am |
Thanks – glad you liked it. Terza rimas are very satisfying to write!